Sunday, October 16, 2011

1st Intro to contrast essay-deleted


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  1. Might work as a topic--you make clear their similarities but only offer two differences in the bridge to the rest of the essay.

    Biggest problem though is the lack of a hook--your first sentence simply states the topic in the flattest possible way without giving the reader any juice, any real reason to read on.

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